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the sun watches the retreating fog
as she lulls over a geometric horizon,
fat brick buildings pretending
to be taller than they are.

the street vendors fight
for their corners on the sidewalk;
foreign cursing heralds the rise from slumber
and the smell of coffee and grease
overtakes the streets.

old men and dark men,
already huddled in the plaza,
argue over their hats,
and wait for buses
as old and dark as they are.

the suits, rarely seen,
dart from car to office
and escape sight until after noon,
pouring together into the streets
like an exotic parade.

five o'clock heralds a homeward migration
while the young smear on color
to prepare for the beginning of their day.

the night beckons with long legs,
red lights, and bass that vibrates the streets.
their blood is music, drink, debauchery;
their lives are quick and painless.

smoke pours from club doors
and belches out pretty girls on unsteady limbs,
drunk more on men than vodka;
another night to forget and repeat again.

but in the end,
the moon dips low and the music fades;
the sun stretches up,
and the old men take to the streets
again.
©2007-2009 `youthculture
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*salshep is running a spiffy keen contest, asking you to write about the city you live in.


ilu, providence. :heart:

edit: extra stanza, reworked ending. someone also mentioned moving the 'like an exotic parade' line to the section about the youth, but i haven't made up my mind yet. thoughts are always appreciated.
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:ohnoes: Not Rhode Island!

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That is a lovely shade of CRAZY.

"When Fred Phelps dies, there will be thousands of angry queers viciously making out at his funeral." =ShakeTheShame
heeeeell yeah!

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#youthculture (killed your dog)
OH MAN I should totally write about Springfield!

...pffft.

Anyway. Good shit. Makes me miss RI.

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Makaaaaaa....ಥ_ಥ
Ohio's better

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That is a lovely shade of CRAZY.

"When Fred Phelps dies, there will be thousands of angry queers viciously making out at his funeral." =ShakeTheShame
Lovely! I enjoyed:

pouring together into the streets
like an exotic parade.


and the beginning.

I'm working on a poem for Salli's contest, too.

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I think if you tightened this up it would be an incredible piece.

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I could only laugh.
dono how i feel about the non-capitalization, other than that, looks good

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-CV
Fortune Favors the Bold
Represent.

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On this side of brightness,
we don't know where to go.
love the sixth stanza. :love:

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